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Mar 25, 9:03pm Top

Were there any ways in which the book could have been improved?

Mar 25, 9:17pm Top

It seemed very convoluted early on (especially the Seagraves piece) then add in the other story lines and it took a while for it all to come together

Mar 25, 11:58pm Top

I agree with >2 bhabeck:. The first section had a lot of information that didn't make sense until later.

Edited: Mar 26, 7:37am Top

I also agree with >2 bhabeck: and >3 Olivermagnus:. I couldn't sort out how these seemingly disconnected plots would come together. I also thought that Caleb was just plain out of character. He wasn't this terrified in the first book. He could have been caution and reluctant even afraid...but his behavior bordered on cowardly. He could have gotten Stone and Milton killed trying to protect him.

Mar 26, 1:54pm Top

>4 Carol420: Caleb may have been portrayed as more extreme this time simply because the death of Jonathan DeHaven affected him directly as well as making him more aware of the potential danger they were in.

Mar 26, 2:44pm Top

>5 bhabeck: That is true.

Mar 26, 2:53pm Top

Bring plot lines together sooner as readers may discard book too early if they thought it doesn't make any sense.

Mar 26, 5:13pm Top

I was a bit disappointed that Alex had such a short (though admittedly important) appearance in this storyline.

Mar 27, 12:48am Top

I have no improvement ideas. I enjoyed the book and was hooked from the beginning. It was so hard for me no to read ahead. It seemed that each break we took from the book was yet another cliffhanger. You are quite good at it Andrew.

Mar 27, 6:39am Top

>9 jodiesohl: That why we call him "The Question Master". I think its the "teacher" in him and we are his unruly class:)

Mar 27, 6:15pm Top

>9 jodiesohl: Andrew will probably tell you that it's pure coincidence when a section ends on a cliffhanger, and that he simply splits the books into even sections, as far as is possible.

Mar 27, 7:57pm Top

>10 Carol420: šŸ˜‚ Now settle down! šŸ˜‚

>11 Sergeirocks: Yes Iā€™d like to take credit but it is pure coincidence.

Mar 28, 8:31am Top

>12 Andrew-theQM: Go ahead and take a little credit...we all need to do that once in awhile:)


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