Angela Smith (8)

Author needs some help with her writing, although it's clear she has some talent. The story meanders and I never managed to care what happened to this ill-defined central character as she limps along in completely unrealistic scenes. It was also disconcerting to find so many British terms coming from a supposedly US character (queue instead of getting in line, bloody as an expletive, etc.). There were too many things just falling magically into place: this is daydream stuff. Not completely show more hopeless, but I'd recommend the writer get some serious help in crafting a compelling novel before her next attempt. She needn't necessarily leave the character behind, but she needs to become more realistically human for most readers to care. show less