Danny Flynn

I received this ebook as a LibraryThing member giveaway with expectation of a review. Well here it is - THIS IS CRAP, really bad CRAP
I have no idea if it is meant to be ironic - it doesn't work,
The spelling is all over the place, even the made up words don't work like they should.
There is random use of all forms of grammar.
The plot is not outlined close enough to the beginning of the book so I was completely lost for several chapters in.
The use of quotes to indicate speech is used show more incorrectly, each person's speech should be on a separate line and it is not, frequently it is difficult to actually tell who is speaking.
The kissing/relationship scenes as well as the descriptions of the women smacks of the writings of a 14 year old boy or one with the mind of a 14 year old boy. In other words women are objectified, treated stupidly.
There are better ways of describing the day to day activities such as going to bed, dressing, eating.
Timing is all over the place. Again with the 14 year old boy as Pizza for many is ordered some two hours before the eaters arrive.

It is possible that some of the issues, such as who the main character is and where he comes from are explained in an earlier book, but I don't want to read it as it was too painful to plow through the book. I finished it - of course I did in respect to what the author was trying to achieve. However my message to Danny Flynn is: get an editor and not one from your group of friends, take criticism and change what is required - this may just have a kernel of a story in it - then burn everything relating to this edition. show less