David Carthage

Clever concept for a story. Could do with a bit more emotion to offset the feeling the reader is being lectured to. The 'learning about history' concept is just a bit too in-your-face for me. It should just happen along the way while we are engrossed in the drama. Having said that, I did love the lecture notes, that worked well. Just needed a bit more emphasis on the character's reactions to the things that were happening. Maybe that's just a boy/girl thing though, I think I get addicted to the touchy/feely parts of a story. This might be just the way boys like their stories to be.… (more)