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I really wanted to like this book, I really wanted to be interested in what was going on and the whole concept of having some kind of spirit within you that you could use as a second person... But there wasn't a single part of this book that I could really get attached to. It was like being back in elementary school and being forced to read a book that wasn't at all something you were interested in. Now I have to write a report on it. Here goes, notes first:
By the end of the first page, I had started reading twelve times and still couldn't really get in to what was happening. Nothing really made sense or caught my attention. It was a bad first impression that might have tainted my experience, but also could have just been the start of the rest...
Alet Allowed the essence of her being to take form inside her chest and leave her body.
This is the best description you are going to get of what this "second self" is. Good luck really enjoying it.
There was a lot of repetition, words like "blocking" and "second self" were things you REALLY got tired of. Come up with some other vocabulary to describe what's going on... or something.
"But try not to romanticize what your mother and I had. I only enjoyed her love and warmth for eight short years before she was taken from me. Such strong love carries a terrible price at the end of days, and perhaps it is a mercy one does not have to pay it."
This was one part of the book I enjoyed.
It's hard to write something without too much exposition. There's a balance needed between throwing it in your face and gently placing it here and there. With a beginning that is really the middle of a story, this book does NOT have that balance.
When he finished, night had fallen and the rain had stopped. Stars twinkled amid the scattered grey clouds that remained after the storm. The red dot that was the point of the Hunter's arrow was nearly at the highest point in the sky.
Sun reflected off the calm surface of the river.
Huh? Wasn't it night? What sun? I'm totally lost!
I also never got involved in the political stuff. It was very hard for me to figure out who was who, what was going on and which character was on whose side. But I'm willing to chalk that up to my total inability to tolerate politics anyway.
There were several typos...
"I will pick on my own" instead of "I will pick OUT my own"
"Alet unlaced the stings of the pouch" instead of "Alet unlaced the STRINGS of the pouch"
"Issiyanna trashed against Essall" was probably the one that made me laugh the most. How did the editor NOT see this stuff?
There was far too much whining in the book.. a character who never stood up for himself, never took steps to just do what he wanted and what he knew was right. I couldn't like him the way I'm sure I was supposed to.
"Sometimes the greater good is more important than one's duty."
"No, Entan. Duty must always be for the greater good."
Both have a point. It's also the second line that was worth remembering, making my ears prick up with hope... 73% of the way through the book.
I'm not real sure the ending was really an ending, but this is the first book in a series, so I guess I can let that slide.
By the end of the first page, I had started reading twelve times and still couldn't really get in to what was happening. Nothing really made sense or caught my attention. It was a bad first impression that might have tainted my experience, but also could have just been the start of the rest...
Alet Allowed the essence of her being to take form inside her chest and leave her body.
This is the best description you are going to get of what this "second self" is. Good luck really enjoying it.
There was a lot of repetition, words like "blocking" and "second self" were things you REALLY got tired of. Come up with some other vocabulary to describe what's going on... or something.
"But try not to romanticize what your mother and I had. I only enjoyed her love and warmth for eight short years before she was taken from me. Such strong love carries a terrible price at the end of days, and perhaps it is a mercy one does not have to pay it."
This was one part of the book I enjoyed.
It's hard to write something without too much exposition. There's a balance needed between throwing it in your face and gently placing it here and there. With a beginning that is really the middle of a story, this book does NOT have that balance.
When he finished, night had fallen and the rain had stopped. Stars twinkled amid the scattered grey clouds that remained after the storm. The red dot that was the point of the Hunter's arrow was nearly at the highest point in the sky.
Sun reflected off the calm surface of the river.
Huh? Wasn't it night? What sun? I'm totally lost!
I also never got involved in the political stuff. It was very hard for me to figure out who was who, what was going on and which character was on whose side. But I'm willing to chalk that up to my total inability to tolerate politics anyway.
There were several typos...
"I will pick on my own" instead of "I will pick OUT my own"
"Alet unlaced the stings of the pouch" instead of "Alet unlaced the STRINGS of the pouch"
"Issiyanna trashed against Essall" was probably the one that made me laugh the most. How did the editor NOT see this stuff?
There was far too much whining in the book.. a character who never stood up for himself, never took steps to just do what he wanted and what he knew was right. I couldn't like him the way I'm sure I was supposed to.
"Sometimes the greater good is more important than one's duty."
"No, Entan. Duty must always be for the greater good."
Both have a point. It's also the second line that was worth remembering, making my ears prick up with hope... 73% of the way through the book.
I'm not real sure the ending was really an ending, but this is the first book in a series, so I guess I can let that slide.
