19-Niko-
>17 LazyGenius: REALLLLLLL
34-Niko-
>33 LazyGenius: grammarly is out for you lol
37-Niko-
*Cough* *Cough*
"GET RID OF ALL THIS DUST!" said an angry old geezer sitting in a corner of the church. "Yes, sir! Working on it now," said the men. This angry old geezer is Kazu Shinichiro, the main minister of the church, and the self-proclaimed "King” of the church.
"FASTER MEN FASTER," Kazu yelled. "KAZU SHUT UP I'M TRYING TO SLEEP", said a young man, who was unhappy to Kazu. "Who are you TALKING TO TORA?" was the reply Tora got. "You," was all Tora simply replied with.
"Shut up before I splash some holy water on you."
"First off- how about you don't do that," Tora responded, "Second off- get ready for the ceremony."
"Tora, you need to be on your best behavior, son" Kazu said with a surprising amount of softness.
"Okay, I get it, you old head." Tora muttered.
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Thoughts?
"GET RID OF ALL THIS DUST!" said an angry old geezer sitting in a corner of the church. "Yes, sir! Working on it now," said the men. This angry old geezer is Kazu Shinichiro, the main minister of the church, and the self-proclaimed "King” of the church.
"FASTER MEN FASTER," Kazu yelled. "KAZU SHUT UP I'M TRYING TO SLEEP", said a young man, who was unhappy to Kazu. "Who are you TALKING TO TORA?" was the reply Tora got. "You," was all Tora simply replied with.
"Shut up before I splash some holy water on you."
"First off- how about you don't do that," Tora responded, "Second off- get ready for the ceremony."
"Tora, you need to be on your best behavior, son" Kazu said with a surprising amount of softness.
"Okay, I get it, you old head." Tora muttered.
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Thoughts?
40-Niko-
>39 LazyGenius: Thanksss :)
53-Niko-
>52 orion_on_paws: I had no idea this was for a story- but I saw the TV thing too late and was genuinely concerned 😭
54-Niko-
>52 orion_on_paws: My thoughts: I revised it a bit!
Old one:
I once was as innocent as everyone was then i was thrown under the bus and saw the world for how it really was seeing everything for how it was i wonder when did it go wrong halloween used to be safe before the killer clown craze sometimes i wish i wasnt american get drunk and party thats the american way are we living in hell itself or is this the world itself is our plan or gods plan to destroy the earth itself roses are red violets are blue we all march toward an impending doom
My version with revisions:
I once was as innocent as everyone was. I was then thrown under the bus and saw the world for how it was. I wonder when it went wrong and how... Halloween used to be safe before the killer clown craze. Sometimes I wish I wasn't American. We get drunk and party that's the "American way". Are we living in hell itself or is this the world itself? Is this our plan or God's plan to destroy the earth itself? Roses are red, violets are blue, we all march toward an impending doom..
Thoughts?
Old one:
I once was as innocent as everyone was then i was thrown under the bus and saw the world for how it really was seeing everything for how it was i wonder when did it go wrong halloween used to be safe before the killer clown craze sometimes i wish i wasnt american get drunk and party thats the american way are we living in hell itself or is this the world itself is our plan or gods plan to destroy the earth itself roses are red violets are blue we all march toward an impending doom
My version with revisions:
I once was as innocent as everyone was. I was then thrown under the bus and saw the world for how it was. I wonder when it went wrong and how... Halloween used to be safe before the killer clown craze. Sometimes I wish I wasn't American. We get drunk and party that's the "American way". Are we living in hell itself or is this the world itself? Is this our plan or God's plan to destroy the earth itself? Roses are red, violets are blue, we all march toward an impending doom..
Thoughts?
65-Niko-
>64 orion_on_paws: no, its not wrong. means ur doing smth right :)
74-Niko-
>72 orion_on_paws: ohhhhhhhhhhhhh *i got no idea how to respond lmaoooo*
96-Niko-
>92 orion_on_paws: and thanks u r too :)
97-Niko-
>95 orion_on_paws: i feel so bad 😭
117jazzymelendez
YO YO YO
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