Private by James Patterson & Maxine Paetro (reviewed by readafew)

Ok here's one I think needs a little work, any help would be appreciated.

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Private by James Patterson and Maxine Paetro is about Jack Morgan owner and operator of Private; a private investigation firm for the rich and powerful. Jack was a military chopper pilot whose father died in prison shortly after giving him the Private firm and a large chunk of change to make it happen the right way this time. We come into the picture when Jack finds out a friend of his was murdered. Next there has been a serial killer on the loose killing high school girls and has started increasing his pace. At the same time Jack's uncle, who owns a piece of a football team, thinks someone is fixing games for illegal betting but he doesn't know who, how or if it's just imaginary. It's rather amazing Jack ever has time to sleep.

This was an average James Patterson book, though with more than average quirky characters. Jacks team seemed to be based off the TV crime dramas like NCIS or Criminal Minds. Like the TV shows, we jump in and only get the highlights for a bunch of these characters which we expect to be filled in more in later 'episodes'. We are given just enough for each so you want to know a little more. Jack has a top notch team, there's Justine, his ex-girlfriend, Del Rio, his ex-Marine, ex-Con buddy, Emilio Cruz the Ex-cop, Dr. Seymour 'Sci' Kloppenberg the forensic criminalist with an online video girlfriend 'Kit Kat' and last but not least Maureen Roth 'Mo-bot' , the middle aged, tattooed computer guru.

Overall it was a decent, fast paced book with a lot going on, like most Patterson books, partially to disguise the plot holes. If you like James Patterson you will be more than happy to add this one to your 'To Be Read' pile. Great light easy read.

Made a few small changes.

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Private by James Patterson and Maxine Paetro is about Jack Morgan owner and operator of Private; a private investigation firm for the rich and powerful. Jack was a military chopper pilot whose father died in prison shortly after giving him the Private firm and a large chunk of change to make it happen the right way. We come into the picture when Jack finds out a friend of his was murdered. Next there has been a serial killer on the loose killing high school girls and has started increasing his pace. At the same time Jack's uncle, who owns a piece of a football team, thinks someone is fixing games for illegal betting but he doesn't know who, how or if it's just imaginary. It's rather amazing Jack ever has time to sleep.

This was an average James Patterson book, though with more than average quirky characters. Jacks team seemed to be based off the TV crime dramas like NCIS or Criminal Minds. Like the TV shows, we jump in and only get the highlights for a bunch of these characters which we expect to be filled in more in later 'episodes'. We are given just enough for each so you want to know a little more. Jack has a top notch team, there's Justine, his ex-girlfriend, Del Rio, his ex-Marine, ex-Con buddy, Emilio Cruz the Ex-cop, Dr. Seymour 'Sci' Kloppenberg the forensic criminalist with an online video girlfriend 'Kit Kat' and last but not least Maureen Roth 'Mo-bot' , the middle aged, tattooed computer guru.

Overall it was a decent, fast paced book with a lot going on, and like most Patterson books, the action was partially to disguise the plot holes. If you like James Patterson you will be more than happy to add this one to your 'To Be Read' pile. Great light and easy read.

Sorry I took so long to respond. I've been tinkering on my own troubled review.

In the first paragraph: Jack was a military chopper pilot whose father died in prison shortly after giving him the Private firm and a large chunk of change to make it happen the right way this time. I know what youy mean, but it reads weird anyway. It's the make it happen the right way this time that is throwing me. I think it needs to be explained better. I assume the 'it' in make it happen is Private?

In the second paragraph: Jacks team should be Jack's team.

Same paragraph: Jack has a top notch team, there's Justine.... I think either you should put in a period after Jack has a top notch team and make the rest a new sentence, or try: Jack's team is top notch: there's Justine...

Third paragraph: the action was partially to disguise should be the action was there partially to disguise

I think the contents of the review are just fine. Nothing seems hazy or under explained.

Thanks! Made a few more changes, sound a little better?

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Private by James Patterson and Maxine Paetro is about Jack Morgan, owner and operator of Private; a private investigation firm for the rich and powerful. Jack was a military chopper pilot whose father died in prison shortly after giving him the Private firm and a large chunk of change to make it a success this time. We come into the picture when Jack finds out a friend of his was murdered. Next there has been a serial killer on the loose killing high school girls and has started increasing his pace. At the same time Jack's uncle, who owns a piece of a football team, thinks someone is fixing games for illegal betting but he doesn't know who, how or if it's just imaginary. It's rather amazing Jack ever has time to sleep.

This was an average James Patterson book, though with more than average quirky characters. Jack's team seemed to be based off the TV crime dramas like NCIS or Criminal Minds. Like the TV shows, we jump in and only get the highlights for a bunch of these characters which we expect to be filled in more in later 'episodes'. We are given just enough for each so you want to know a little more. Jack has a top notch team. There's Justine, his ex-girlfriend, Del Rio, his ex-Marine, ex-Con buddy, Emilio Cruz the Ex-cop, Dr. Seymour 'Sci' Kloppenberg the forensic criminalist with an online video girlfriend 'Kit Kat' and last but not least Maureen Roth 'Mo-bot' , the middle aged, tattooed computer guru.

Overall it was a decent, fast paced book with a lot going on, and like most Patterson books, the action was there partially to disguise the plot holes. If you like James Patterson you will be more than happy to add this one to your 'To Be Read' pile. Great light and easy read.

Much better (to me anyway).

One last thing I didn't catch the first time: Private by James Patterson and Maxine Paetro is about Jack Morgan owner and operator of Private. That sentence needs a comma after Jack Morgan I think.