
PowerOne
Author of Trained To Submit
Works by PowerOne
Intergalactic Bondage Colony: Book 1 3 copies
Airport Strip Search 1 copy
The Senator's Dark Desires 1 copy
Ghost Master 1 copy
Runaway Wife 1 copy
Slave of the Kremlin 1 copy
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At the time of writing this review, I'm halfway through the text, and even though the novel seemed to start out okay, I'm giving up on it.
The premise of this novel may be disgusting to some, titillating to others.
Whichever is the case, the enjoyment of the novel as a whole is severly hampered by several issues.
First issue is the writing style. There's spelling/grammar mistakes. But even worse, there is shifting pov and sloppy pov throughout the text.
Second, there is virtually no character show more building, we're looking at cardboard figures here.
Third, and this is unforgivable, the author uses 'tell', not 'show' methods for conveying the story. For instance, the author will tell you that the girl finds something humiliating, instead of showing you that this is the case.
Fourth and worst, it's turning repetitious. It's basically the same story over and over again, maybe different people, but the same sentiments, sentences, actions, penetrations, etc etc, over and over again. Kinda like being stuck in an endless loop. How stimulating is that? Not at all... show less
The premise of this novel may be disgusting to some, titillating to others.
Whichever is the case, the enjoyment of the novel as a whole is severly hampered by several issues.
First issue is the writing style. There's spelling/grammar mistakes. But even worse, there is shifting pov and sloppy pov throughout the text.
Second, there is virtually no character show more building, we're looking at cardboard figures here.
Third, and this is unforgivable, the author uses 'tell', not 'show' methods for conveying the story. For instance, the author will tell you that the girl finds something humiliating, instead of showing you that this is the case.
Fourth and worst, it's turning repetitious. It's basically the same story over and over again, maybe different people, but the same sentiments, sentences, actions, penetrations, etc etc, over and over again. Kinda like being stuck in an endless loop. How stimulating is that? Not at all... show less
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