T S Welti

I finished Darklandia, by T.S. Welti, quickly, but it's taken me a month and a half to review it.
What I love about dystopian novels is that there are always people who rebel against the system and take a stand against their treatment. And in that, Darklandia does not disappoint -- but it ends up going somewhere not quite expected.
The story revolves around Sera Fisk and her life in the dystopian society of Atraxia. Water is severely rationed, breeding is government controlled, and in a twist on the usual dystopian fare, people are required to spend an hour a day in a virtual reality pod, where you may excise yourself of your darker desires.
As I read books, I take notes on things that I liked or have problems with so that I can make note of them in reviews. Darklandia was no exception in this case. But then I got to the end. If you've read any of the other reviews for this book, you know that there is a huge twist in the last chapter. And while I personally LOVED it...it did throw a wrench in my review.
How much of what I wrote down still matters? For example, a lot of the things I thought were flaws in the story now seemed to be hints toward the true nature of what's happening in the book. How do I talk about those things now?
This book is a dark, intense story, and I think it really needs to be read twice to be fully appreciated.
There is a sequel in the works, and I'm really excited to see how things play out in the next book, especially in terms of characters like Nyx. Will he show up again? I loved the relationship there, but I'm not sure what the ending of the book means for Nyx and Sera.
But mostly I want to know what will happen to Sera. I loved her as a character, and I am definitely rooting for her.
Note: I received a free copy of this book through the LibraryThing Early Reviewers program. This has no bearing on the content of my review.… (more)

I struggled to read this book, picking it up and putting it down (albeit virtually) over and over again until I finally finished reading it. over a period of months. And I have struggled even more to write a fair review.

This book was a creative effort gone wrong. I commend the author for undertaking a complex concept and occasionally capturing my attention, but the lack of cohesiveness and the lack of continuity, compounded by the non-existent editing, resulted in just a single star. .

The imagination that filters through this tale indicates potential... But rather than starting over with this story, the author might consider using that imagination to write a new story. But this time, develop the characters first and outline the story. Then write the story based on that outline. Review it, edit it, and after the second or third draft, send it to a professional editor. After that, you may have something worth publishing.… (more)

I received this book through the Early Reviewer program and although YA is not usually my cup of tea, I tried to give it a fair shake. I really did. Unfortunately, I couldn't find much to like about it.

Taking the ending first, I will say that the surprise plot twist at the very end was interesting. I didn't see it coming, and it did make me stop and think. But that was too little too late.

The plot concept is not original. In the future, America is ruled by mysterious, sinister forces that keep the population under control using brainwashing and drugs. One young woman is recruited by the secret underground resistance movement, where she discovers that she alone holds the key to saving humanity from mindless enslavement and zzzz...Oh, sorry, I bored myself to sleep just writing that plot summary.

The writing is equally mediocre. The author apparently has never had a lesson in the proper use of tense in the English language, as she(?) consistently misuses it, using the simple past when she should be using the past perfect. In addition, as so often happens with self-published books, this story suffers profoundly from the lack of careful editing. A quality editor would have fixed the tense issues, as well as other grammatical problems like use of the wrong homonym ("site" instead of "sight," "ceased" instead of "seized," etc.). A skilled editor would also have called attention to plot holes both minor (characters having the same conversation multiple times on a page; a character stands up and then a few paragraphs later stands up again; characters sit at the dinner table but never eat) and major. I could go on into a litany of the big plot holes in this story, but what would be the point? The surprise plot twist at the end is a convenient out for the author to say "aha, but that wasn't really a plot hole because..." Sorry, no. If it jumps out at me while I'm reading and is never satisfactorily resolved, it's still a plot hole.

The story's protagonist spends approximately three-fourths of the novel being dragged through various streets, corridors, secret passageways, and subway lines (the latter mysteriously still in perfect working order even though no one knows about them) by members of the rebellion, who shout long paragraphs of exposition at her while they shunt her from place to place, answering half her questions with "I'll explain that later." This is not good storytelling. And when the protagonist isn't being lectured, she's lecturing us, the readers, on the details of her society and its history! Overall the book contains WAAAAY too much exposition, demonstrating that the author has never heard the "show, don't tell" rule of creative writing.

But my main issue with the story is that too little attention is given to the protagonist's process of discovery/realization of what is really going on in her society. We're supposed to imagine that for 17 years she sailed blithely along in this environment happily brainwashed, questioning nothing, and then a few cryptic words from her grandmother turn her entire worldview upside down; not only does she immediately understand what grandma was implying, but she immediately accepts it as true also, with no evidence of internal conflict, denial, or similar emotional turmoil that one might expect to come with such a revelation. Furthermore, for a girl who has spent her whole life being drugged into submission, she shows remarkable intellect/insight when it comes to deducing the underlying political situation. It simply is not believable. The final straw for me was the scene where the protagonist, having only ever gotten her nutrition from liquid slop, tastes an apple for the first time. The author devotes almost no time at all to describing how this young girl reacts to her first taste of real, sweet, delicious food. We learn that the apple flesh cuts her gums and make them bleed (which leads me to wonder: could humans really survive on liquid nutrition alone and still have strong healthy teeth after several generations?), but she then goes on to eat the whole apple -- despite having been warned that she should only eat half because her system can't handle it -- and we get absolutely no description of how that sensory experience feels for her. Again, this is just unforgivably bad writing.

It seems clear to me from reading some of the other reviews that I am not the target audience for this book, and so be it. That's both the advantage and the risk of the Early Reviewer program, I suppose.… (more)