I would like some help with my book

This isn't a secure forum, so it's really not a good idea to post the actual text of the book here. Publishers might consider it already having used it's first printing rights. (I'm not a lawyer nor a publisher, just read a lot on the subject.)

Also you might get better help with writing things over in this group:
http://www.librarything.com/groups/hobnobwithauthors