Not being familiar with the universe in which this story takes place, the first 25% (and last 5%) reads like a boring and unnecessary litany of names and places that I don't understand. I also really didn't care for the philosophizing about god or religion or whatever was going on there. I clearly am not the target audience for this piece. ( )

Vox Day is in love with EPIC FANTASY NAMES. The Waste of Kurs-magog. Arbhadis, Night’s Mistress. The chapter house of the Ordo Sancti Dioscuri. So much filler. So talky.

The heathens come to God's monks, and are won over by the sheer amazingness of scripture and convert. Even when the heathens are magical elves and the monks are the boringest ever. They hang out, help travelers and the poor (with a dab of economic teaching thrown in for free), pray, and copy manuscripts. I know monks aren't necessarily exciting in real life, but if you're going to put them in your story, have them be more than the most obsequious people ever.

"Therefore no incorruptible thing sometimes is, and sometimes is not, whereas everything which has a beginning does not exist prior to its existence." WTF DOES THIS EVEN MEAN??

SPOILER! All the monks are red shirts. Vox Day kills them all off and my reaction is THANK FUCKING GOD! ( )